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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish.

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There are many points of view that
professionals
such
 as engineers, doctors, or architects must
work
 in their studying or training
country
 or not ,or they should have the freedom to
work
 in foreign countries they wish. In my opinion, those
professionals
 should not
have
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free to
work
in
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anywhere they wish; they should
work
 in their trying
country
. There are many reasons why
professionals
 should
work
 in
their
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country
 where they were studying or training.
First,
professionals
 have to study the regulations that depend on their careers;
for
example
, architects and engineers should learn how to build a building within the legal of the construction which is dependent on every
country
.
Moreover
, people can give a permit for doctors to kill them in some countries,but some can not. In addition, lawyers can only
work
 in their training
country
 because
legal is depending
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 on the
country
 where they
learned
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.
Finally
, there is some regulation giving permits to their
country
 residents can
work
 only, no other foreign
for
example
 hair
cutter
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cutters
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inThailand
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in Thailand
.
However
, it is
much
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many
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 more reasons why
professionals
 should
work
 in another
country
 different from the training
country
.
For
example
, a developing
country
 may not give a salary equal to a developed
country
as
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,so it is better to get a higher salary.
Moreover
, it is better to have
an experiences
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an experience
experiences
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 in another
country
for
example
 architects can have
a
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apply
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more
various
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varied
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 designs from
over
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all over
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 the world ,or engineers can have
a
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apply
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better technology to use in their career field. In conclusion, it is many regulations to force
professionals
 to
work
 in their training
country
.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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