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Space explorations costs tax payers an extra orbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space explorations?

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Each and every year, the government have to invest a huge amount of money in order to carry out
space
 research. Even though these kinds of explorations allow us to broaden our knowledge about the outer world above us,
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wastage
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 of money and time. There are a plethora of merits and downfalls which will be elaborated
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Firstly
 and foremost,
scientists
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 main aim in performing
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 as possible explorations is to discover new sources of matter
such
 as planets, solar systems, stars etc.
However
, there is a dilemma among the society that there are planets other than the earth where species called aliens
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,
nevertheless
, no source of evidence is yet found to prove
this
 discussion. As a consequence, of
this
 research in the nearby future scientists,might be able to un-wrap mysterious discoveries far beyond our horizon. To mention an example, in the early 2000s, they found out that pluto which was previously considered to be a planet is actually a star.
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space
 explorations
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 our spectrum of knowledge about
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outer
space
. Alternatively, it is considered to be extravagantly useless since the earth itself has soo
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problems within it to be solved. In spite, of using the money for experiments they can be rather invested in developing countries in order for them to overcome poverty and people to live lavishly. Many people living in developing countries have insufficient amounts of basic human needs like food, shelter, or proper infrastructure facilities as
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example, people living in slums in India do not have proper lavatory facilities .
Thus
,
instead
 of spending cash on hopeless experiments, it would be a wise choice to fulfil communities with fundamental needs To conclude, the
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 massive investments
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space
 experiments
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 main affirmative to be considered that it is a massive platform to freshen our knowledge about
space
 while the biggest drawback is that these investments can be focused on benefiting humans living under limited resources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • technological innovations
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • economic stimulus
  • international cooperation
  • financial investment
  • allocation of resources
  • environmental impact
  • ethical considerations
  • high-risk ventures
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