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What is more imoprtant qualifications or experience ?

#imoprtant #qualifications
In
this
 recent world, it is obvious that both qualifications and experiences are crucial to
work
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 life. It is closely related to the position that a
job
 seeker applies for, and whether the employer is looking for a fresh or experienced candidate.
However
, getting a degree in a certain field is a considerable high achievement in itself for anyone. Being a diligent student would give you extra credit on your
job
 search journey, especially if your major is in high demand in the market.
Furthermore
, fresh graduates are likely to get jobs immediately after their graduation ,and the reason that lies behind sorted action is that many employers are willing to fill their vacancies with some employees who have
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degree
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 in specific majors that are profoundly requested by the market.
On the other hand
, improving the educational background by obtaining the proper
experience
 would be
favorable
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by
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 many companies. So, employers
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my
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 set in
their jobs requirements
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the requirements of their job
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 that
experience
 is essential for your application to be considered.
Moreover
, getting an
experience
 in your major would carry abundant benefits for any company.
As a result
, the employer
do
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 not waste the time
in
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training the employees and
start
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 immediately with their
job
 tasks since they have a good prior knowledge of the
job
 duties. To sum up, we can not deny how vital it is to have
experience
 in any position, perhaps
this
 may lead you to a higher position in the future, but
also
 having only
a
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good
qualifications
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qualification
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may be
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maybe
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 the key to
reach
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 your highest potential in your work journey.
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