Human activities have led negative effects on plants and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Extinction of different
type
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of fauna and flora is often considered as the most urgent environmental
problems
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problem
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that we have to deal with nowadays.
Although
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, some people could
be disagree
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because
there
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they
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are more pressing with other things. I totally agree that
extinction
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the extinction
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of
species
is a very serious
problem
, but
also
I believe that global warming is a more crucial situation that we have to deal with. On one hand, the disappearance of some
species
has been increasing over the years
as a result
from
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human activities,
such
as deforestation or
also
illegal hunting.
This
is a big
problem
for some countries because these
species
have a cultural significance.
Moreover
, the disappearance of the
species
will be
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of
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the loss of biodiversity and ecosystem.
On the other hand
, I have been Reading and listening about
this
problem
. Recently, global warming
for example
,
which is
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has been
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described
with
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increasing
amount
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amounts
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of carbon monoxide in the atmosphere and the result will be
increase
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an increase
the increase
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of
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temperature and sea levels. Pollution is
also
increasing and is one of the biggest
problem
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problems
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around the world because
the
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poor air quality has harmful effects on human health, particularly in
respiratory
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the respiratory
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system and cardiovascular
system
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systems
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.
Also
, can
be
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damage plants and animals like us.
To sum up
, I
am totally agree
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that the extinction of
species
must be prioritized.
However
, the experts believe
that is
most important the temperature and sea levels.
Furthermore
, humans
we
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have to save the environment and help them to have more control
about
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over
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it,
otherwise
it will be even worse.
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