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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What are governments do to address these problems? What can individuals people do?

#humans #environment #governments #address #individuals #people
when we said
environment
 we mean nature. the
environment
 is very important to our
life
 it looks like
life
 give us oxygen to a new day and protects us from the most dangerous radiation so we should keep it clean and save from our action every day how we can deal with
environment
 to make
life
 kindly
First
 overall governments make up some good plans to decrease carbon dioxide from grow a lot of trees and using modern transportation services
also
, there can use natural resources
For example
 the sun and action water in a river
therefore
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, governments are not
response
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responsible
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 only and people how we can help governments to keep it good from saving it clean. In conclusion,a clean
environment
good
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is good
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 for us and give us comfortable
life
 so, in
myopinion
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my opinion
, we should take care of our
life
 and make it clean to make
the
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apply
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life
 good and
beautifull
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beautiful
beautifully
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