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The picture below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate the original proposed architectural plan of
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 museum in 1998 and the changes the museum has experienced after a decade. Overall, there were minor changes in the initial plan.
Firstly
, some structures remained the same.
For example
, the cafe on the north side, the tickets area, and the entrance or exit remained unchanged.
Also
, two of the permanent exhibition rooms located at the
north-east
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 of the map remained constant, as well as the garden.
However
, there have been some changes as well. the former
third
 permanent
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showroom
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show room
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 has been relocated from
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the north-west
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north-west
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northwest
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 to
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the south-east
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south-east
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southeast
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 wing.
Furthermore
, the washroom, which used to be
at
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 the
south-east
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southeast
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 has been relocated closer to the cafe for easy access by visitors. Again, the shop is now at the west wing of the main
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exist
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exit
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.
Temporary
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showroom
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show room
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 has
also
 been relocated to the west of the map.
Moreover
, new structures
has
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 been developed as well. There is an establishment of a restaurant at the
north-west
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 wing of the map so that visitors who get hungry could grab something to eat.
Additionally
, the garden has been renovated to include a sitting area for people who go to the cafe, and fountains have been included to beautify the environment.
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