Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s society, many young

people

have driver’s licenses.

Traffic

accidence

are

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easy to happen with cars, so

traffic

safety

is very important in our life. some

people

think that the government should raise the legal driving

age

, which will effectively improve

road

safety

. But I disagree with

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view. Admittedly,

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minimum

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legal

age

for driving cars and motorcycles can improve

road

safety

. Some senior high school students, whose minds are immature, like to seek excitement, which will enable them to get their driver’s

license

quickly at the legal

age

, and the speed will be very fast after they get on the

road

, so it is very easy to have

traffic

accidences, which will have a bad influence on the

road

In addition

, out of curiosity about cars or motorcycles, they may choose to take a driver’s

license

when they just turn

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age

, which will bring life danger to

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society. But

this

situation is not absolute.

First

of all, it

not

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only young

people

who are more prone to

traffic

accidences. Some middle

age

and elderly

people

also

have accidents. So raising the

age

to improve

road

safety

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not

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the not

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only

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way. There are many other ways. The government can increase the difficulty or reduce the passing rate of driving

test

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This

can effectively make more candidates remember the knowledge of

traffic

safety

, which is conducive to improving

traffic

safety

For example

, it was not difficult to get a driver's

license

before, but with the development of society, it has gradually become more difficult to get a driver's

license

in the construction of

road

facilities, which has

also

improved

road

safety

in recent years.

On the other hand

traffic

safety

education should permeate all aspects. Let citizens consciously accept

road

safety

education and improve their awareness of safe driving.

Traffic

police should receive more professional training

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so that they can direct

traffic

more accurately and improve

the

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safe driving in the morning rush hour or evening rush hour.

In addition

, some

road

signs should be clearer and more accurate. All these methods can improve

road

safety

. It is not the only way to improve

road

safety

by raising the driving

age

. So I disagree

this

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view. All in all, raising the legal

age

to drive a car or motorcycle is not the only way to ensure

road

safety

, and there are many ways to improve

road

safety

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Topic Vocabulary:

minimum legal age
road safety
driving/riding
maturity
decision-making abilities
risky behavior
graduated driving programs
extended learning periods
strict testing
continuous education
advanced driver training
traffic laws enforcement
advanced driver-assistance systems (ADAS)
accidents reduction
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Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

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