Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today’s society, many young
people
have driver’s licenses.
Traffic
accidence
are
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easy to happen with cars, so
traffic
safety
is very important in our life. some
people
think that the government should raise the legal driving
age
, which will effectively improve
road
safety
. But I disagree with
this
view. Admittedly,
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minimum
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legal
age
for driving cars and motorcycles can improve
road
safety
. Some senior high school students, whose minds are immature, like to seek excitement, which will enable them to get their driver’s
license
quickly at the legal
age
, and the speed will be very fast after they get on the
road
, so it is very easy to have
traffic
accidences, which will have a bad influence on the
road
.
In addition
, out of curiosity about cars or motorcycles, they may choose to take a driver’s
license
when they just turn
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age
, which will bring life danger to
the
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society. But
this
situation is not absolute.
First
of all, it
not
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only young
people
who are more prone to
traffic
accidences. Some middle
age
and elderly
people
also
have accidents. So raising the
age
to improve
road
safety
in
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not
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only
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way. There are many other ways. The government can increase the difficulty or reduce the passing rate of driving
test
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.
This
can effectively make more candidates remember the knowledge of
traffic
safety
, which is conducive to improving
traffic
safety
.
For example
, it was not difficult to get a driver's
license
before, but with the development of society, it has gradually become more difficult to get a driver's
license
in the construction of
road
facilities, which has
also
improved
road
safety
in recent years.
On the other hand
,
traffic
safety
education should permeate all aspects. Let citizens consciously accept
road
safety
education and improve their awareness of safe driving.
Traffic
police should receive more professional training
,
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so that they can direct
traffic
more accurately and improve
the
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safe driving in the morning rush hour or evening rush hour.
In addition
, some
road
signs should be clearer and more accurate. All these methods can improve
road
safety
. It is not the only way to improve
road
safety
by raising the driving
age
. So I disagree
this
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view. All in all, raising the legal
age
to drive a car or motorcycle is not the only way to ensure
road
safety
, and there are many ways to improve
road
safety
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimum legal age
  • road safety
  • driving/riding
  • maturity
  • decision-making abilities
  • risky behavior
  • graduated driving programs
  • extended learning periods
  • strict testing
  • continuous education
  • advanced driver training
  • traffic laws enforcement
  • advanced driver-assistance systems (ADAS)
  • accidents reduction
  • statistical evidence
  • real-world examples
  • public awareness campaigns
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