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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly nagetive impact on local inhabitants and the environment, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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Tourism
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 is becoming an important part of the lifestyle.It has increased in the
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 decades.There are both good and bad impacts of
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.Here I will discuss the advantages as well as the disadvantages of
tourism
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. Social media is playing a vital role in everyone's life and that became the most impacting part of
tourism
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.There are social media influencers or vloggers, and
People
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 do follow them.Because of that followers get more information about many
places
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 by sitting at home as vloggers provide detailed information about particular
places
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 or hotels which creates created interest in going to that particular place. Nowadays we are having many online hotel booking applications which give lots of discounts
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.
People
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 can sit at home and plan international trips with one click.Travelling keeps pupils happy and energetic.During , the pandemic all travel was banned all over overseas but now it has been opened and a number of pupils travelling and visiting their dream
places
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 which is a good profit for the government in an economical way.
Tourism
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 plays a crucial role in a part of the economy. On the other ,hand travelling impacts nature in a bad way. While travelling tourists use stuff like" use and throw " and they do not vanish in a particular way but they throw their waste anywhere. In our ,country
people
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 visit historical
places
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 for parties and keep waste as it is.
People
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 should understand the meaning of historical
places
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 or tourist
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. They should carry their garbage with them and throw that in dustbins which will keep those
places
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 clean and beautiful.
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 a number of pupils don't understand the meaning of drinking water they use that for cleaning or any other stuff which is a waste of water and which leads to a shortage in summer.Fort is the best example for
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 explanation. In my opinion,
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tourism
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 includes both advantages as well as disadvantages.
People
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 should think and act wisely which will give them more advantages.
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