There are many inventions in human history, but some people think that the most important invention is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

We cannot imagine our life without science and progressive technologies
as a result
of its development. We must admit that it is impossible to imagine any single day without
such
things as refrigerators, washing machines,
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, without the Internet. We are so accustomed to all these objects that it seems that they have always been, are will surround us forever.
However
, we remember history and realize that
such
a familiar item as a personal mobile phone appeared only at the end of the
last
century. At
this
point in the narrative, we note that all human achievements were born not independently, but
as a result
of the evolution of science and technology and the continuity of
this
knowledge. Necessary to mention, that society
also
needs to remember the experience fundamental function of history: it collects and transmits any attainments in the fields of culture, technique, religion and linguistics.
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with proper analysis, age-old cognition warns against repeating fatal mistakes.
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in the education of young generations,
the
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from
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past events
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the basis for a person's worldview. If modern politicians and statesmen took into account the lessons from the
globe
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past,
then
, quite possibly, monstrous wars could have been prevented. A statesman without
moral
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compass can cause disaster for a nation and use scientific
accomplishment
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like
nuclear
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a nuclear
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weapon
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weapons
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for inhumane purposes. I'd like to make two conclusions.
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,
the
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technological progress is a step up for
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industry
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the industry
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and in the comfort of life. Whereas the
second
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point
pain
plain
poin
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point
is
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millennial
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the millennial
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mankind experience makes it possible to choose the right moral guidelines and values,
to
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realize personal responsibility for the fate of the country and the world.
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