Some people think that children should be taught how to cook and grow food at school. Do you agree or disagree?

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should have knowledge of cooking and

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academic knowledge and practical information which help

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do not teach how to grow food.

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may understand by students accurately.

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in houses not at

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should encourage

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use to practise a lot for planting fruits and

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the conclusion that making food and growing food should

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

218 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Life skills
Self-sufficiency
Sustainability
Nutrition
Curriculum
Practical skills
Healthier lifestyle
Environmental stewardship
Teamwork
Emotional well-being
Resource allocation
Hands-on learning
Culinary arts
Agricultural education
Food literacy

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Some people think that children should be taught how to cook and grow food at school. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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in some place old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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