Some people think that children should be taught how to cook and grow food at school. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often considered few masses argue that
juvenile
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should have knowledge of cooking and
grow
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eatables in
school
.
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I completely disagree with the statement which
further
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to
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conclusion. Analyzing the statement and explaining
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, the
first
and foremost reason behind is that learning cooking at
school
is inappropriate because education
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provides
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academic knowledge and practical information which help
young
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generation to achieve their an aim.
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,
in
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many
school
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schools
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do not teach how to grow food.
Furthermore
,
educator
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mainly
focus
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on theories and
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so
it
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they
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may understand by students accurately.
Thus
, to learn how to make
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cuisines
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in more
prefarable
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preferable
preferably
at
home
under
guidenence
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guidance
of parents.
For example
, a survey conducted by The Times of India mentioned in their article that multifarious guardian
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to teach cooking and plantation at
home
only because it can be better
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in houses not at
school
because they only
provides
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bookish knowledge. Probing ahead,
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the school
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school
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schools
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should encourage
young
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the young
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generation to be
self independent
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.
Hence
,
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children
childrens
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children
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use to practise a lot for planting fruits and
vegetable
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at
home
. Meanwhile,
their
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in no theories to teach cooking in learning
centers
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. In a nutshell,
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according
accoding
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according
to the
,
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arguemnt
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argument
arguments
one can reach
to
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the conclusion that making food and growing food should
be practise
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be practised
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at
home
not in
school
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Sustainability
  • Nutrition
  • Curriculum
  • Practical skills
  • Healthier lifestyle
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Teamwork
  • Emotional well-being
  • Resource allocation
  • Hands-on learning
  • Culinary arts
  • Agricultural education
  • Food literacy
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