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today more and more people are travelling than ever before. why is this case? what are the benefits of travelling ?

#people #case
In the present
world
, the number of
travellers
 has increased significantly than it used to be in previous years.
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Development
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Development
Developement
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The developement
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 of transportation and
wide
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the wide
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 publicity of
tourists
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tourist
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places
 are two of the common reasons
of
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for
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such
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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travellers
 around the
world
. The subsequent paragraphs will contain more details about the uprise of tourists and the advantages they get
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through
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trough
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through
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 the tours.
To begin
 with,
development
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the development
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 of
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transportation
tranportation
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transportation
 facilities over the years gave human-being great accessibility to
the
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apply
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places
 that once
was
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were
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 impossible to reach.
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,
the
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modern vehicles not only provide
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speedy
speedey
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speed
 mobilization but
also
it
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apply
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reduced the costs of
the
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apply
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travel. People now can afford both
times
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time
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 and money to have a tour in a
distance
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distant
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 place.
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, with
fastest
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the fastest
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aeroplanes
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,aeroplanes
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 individuals can go
for
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to
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a
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apply
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thousands
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thousand
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miles
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of miles
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 away
places
 during a
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week-long
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week long
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week-long
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 holiday and come back within
shortest
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the shortest
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 possible time to attend
office
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the office
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. Another point worth mentioning is that nowadays, tourism has become a great industry where nations put a huge investment to grab
travellers
 around the
world
. To be more specific, tourist
spend
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great
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a great
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 amount of money while they are on
trip
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a trip
the trip
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 and those expenditures
causes
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cause
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 currency gain
of
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in
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 the host country.
Consequently
, tourist spots get much attention and with the help of
internet
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the internet
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 tourist agencies make lucrative
advertisement
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advertisements
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 so that visitors around the
world
 come to visit that
places
.
Therefore
, internet users get tempted by those advertisements and try to
fo
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go
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 for a trip whenever they
afford
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itafford
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.
However
, travelling brings many advantages to the
travellers
 as it
broaden
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broadens
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up
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apply
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their minds with diverse cultures,
social
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and social
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 and political norms.
Also
, visiting natural
places
 keeps people's mind fresh and help them regain the energy that many of us lose with the stresses from
workplace
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the workplace
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. To conclude, it can be reiterated that
development
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the development
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 of modern
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transport
tranport
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transport
 facilities along with tourism industries let people
to
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travel more frequently than before.
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