Some people think the best way to improve road safety is to increase minimum legal age for driving cars and motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays,more and more urban
people
utilize vehicles to go places where they want.Partly citizens wanna to
promote driver’s Remove the extra word
wanna
age
in
Change preposition
as
legal
minimum for Correct article usage
a legal
people’s
safe
.In my opinion,Replace the word
safety
I’m
Change the verb form
I agree
agree
a half view.Add the preposition
onagree
toagree
withagree
Then
i
will from Change the capitalization
I
people
and the government
to analyze this
topic.
It must be admitted that raising minimum
Add an article
the minimum
age
for traffic
driving.
It is efficient for Add a missing verb
is.
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreasing
number
of accidents.In Correct article usage
the number
these
Correct determiner usage
this
way
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,way
people
will get more mature to realize traffic
legal how significant are
.And increase Change the verb form
is
people’s
confident
when they Replace the word
confidence
on
the Add a missing verb
are on
road
.Meanwhile,these way
can gain other Change the determiner
this way
these ways
residents
trust.But if solely Change noun form
residents'
resident's
improve
Wrong verb form
improving
people’s
age
,many adult
still not change their bad driving habits,plus only little group would Change to a plural noun
adults
had
Change the verb form
have
impact
.So Add an article
an impact
this
path is not absolute
method,and Add an article
an absolute
solve
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solving
this
issue is not much
simple.
On the one hand,citizens need to get more Correct quantifier usage
apply
traffic relevant
knowledge in high school and university.Because Add a hyphen
traffic-relevant
these
period Correct determiner usage
this
are
Change the verb form
is
the
important Correct article usage
an
age
to learn driving skills,plus people
can remember a large number of traffic
rules.It is significant that initial safety knowledge for cars and motorcycles
Change the noun form
motorcycle
drivers
.For example
,if a boy who
didn’t Correct pronoun usage
apply
has
Wrong verb form
have
strong
memory quantity for Correct article usage
a strong
traffic
safe
.He would Replace the word
safety
had
Change the verb form
have
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
possible
to crate accidents.Replace the word
possibility
In addition
,no matter people’s
Correct word choice
whether people’s
age
are
young or old,they Change the verb form
is
also
should enlarge extraordinary safety awareness.The sense of safety is like some insurance.When drivers
want to drive on the road
,they always put awareness at
Change preposition
apply
first
then
start Correct word choice
and then
engine
up.Add an article
the engine
For instance
,when a worker go
to Change the verb form
goes
company
by motorcycle Correct article usage
the company
in
every morning.He should have a strong Change preposition
apply
willing
Replace the word
willingness
for
Change preposition
to
maintain
Change the verb form
maintaining
people’s
safe,plus it can also
help their family members to feel safe.
On the other hand
,relevant organizations of traffic
management should not only focused
on Replace the word
focus
drivers
Change noun form
drivers'
driver's
age
but also
pay attention to the scale of driving
Add an article
the driving
exam
.Expand the test range and add more Fix the agreement mistake
exams
analyze
questions of real situations.It can help Replace the word
analysis
people
get more driving skills and ability
before they drive on the Fix the agreement mistake
abilities
road
.Then
reduce a
number of accidents Change the article
the
was
Change the verb form
were
took
.Wrong verb form
taken
The
Correct article usage
A
driver
licence is the Change noun form
driver's
first
qualification for citizen
.So the Correct article usage
a citizen
government
and people
must be
attach more importance Unnecessary verb
apply
in
it.Change preposition
to
Besides
,the government
should increase the punishments for people
who was break traffic
laws.People
doesn’t
fond of punishments.So it is efficient that use Change the verb form
don’t
these
Change the determiner
this method
these methods
Fix the agreement mistake
methods
method
to educate guys.So that Fix the agreement mistake
methods
drivers
will have more sense of safe
when they Replace the word
safety
driving
cars or motorcycles on the Wrong verb form
drive
road
.For instance
,a person who
parked Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
car in the middle of the Correct article usage
a
road
.His car was already impact
Wrong verb form
impacting
other
vehicles.At that time,Policeman need to Change preposition
by other
educated
and forfeited him immediately in order to make Add a missing verb
be educated
environment
of society Add an article
the environment
an environment
road
better,plus let him become to
a good guy who Change preposition
apply
obey
all Change the verb form
obeys
of
Change preposition
apply
traffic
rules.
In brief,I am not totally all Add an article
the traffic
agree
Add the preposition
onagree
toagree
withagree
this
opinion.There should be more and more nice solutions for people
and the government
except increase the age
instead
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