In some countries, small town-center shops are going out of business because people tend to drive to large out-of-town stores. As a result, people without cars have limited access to out-of-town stores, and it may result in an increase in the use of cars. Do you think the disadvantages of this change outweigh its advantages?

In recent years,more and more
people
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to
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life quality.Some smaller shops would face
bankrupt
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in
local
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town area.Increasing
people
likes
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to
driving
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vehicles to
the
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far place
then
buy stuff.I consider
this
event is
harm
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more than
profit
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.So
i
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will analyze
this
problem in residents and the government of
city
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.
Firstly
,
people
likes
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to
driving
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car and purchase goods in faraway locations.It might
caused
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cause
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a lot of cars emission.These exhausts are definitely harmful to human bodies.Plus even the
town
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air condition would
got
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worse.It is
bad
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the bad
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impact
for
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the
earth
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environment.If citizens realized
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their mistakes
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and decrease drive times.The environment will be better than before.
Furthermore
,young
people
have to buy a new car if small urban
center
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stores were
canceled
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.Those
people
will face to
amounts
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of economic pressures.Meanwhile,They
also
have to spend lots of
times
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time
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for
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buying something.Not only cost them too much money but
also
consume
people
more energy.The elder
people
also
needs
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to solve plenty of difficulties.Because They can’t drive and do not live with their children.
Besides
,no more supermarkets are close to older
people
.And
this
group of older
people
will cause the most
harmful
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for the benefit.
Secondly
,Local
town-center
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town-centre
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shops
are disappear
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are disappearing
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step by step.
This
situation
lead
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to urban commercial trade data
are
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going down.It may cause
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city
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economic degree is
decline
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.Living markets occupy
major
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economic in
city
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after all.
For example
,
people
living in Beijing China which is a
city
rapidly
development
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.These
people
are capable of easily
find
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finding
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more than two or three supermarkets around them.
Moreover
,with the development of
the
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vehicle numbers raising in
this
city
.
People
are likely to create sorts of accidents.
Such
as:
broke
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down、
hits
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some
people
or mammals、fuel explosion.Plus every year a large number of
peoples
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people
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was die
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or
injury
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injured
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in
the
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vehicle accidents.These problems are not good for the government and residents.If not have
much
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cars maybe
city
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the city
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would be comfortable and peaceful.
For instance
,
common
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rural has fewer cars than
urban
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the urban
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,plus has
much
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larger area.And
urban
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city
of
high density
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vehicles
have
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more accidents than
the
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rural
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. In conclusion,
i
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will stand on my view that
this
phenomenon more harms than
interests
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.It is not only adverse for
people
of different stages
,
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but
also
has more hurt in the government and
city
.
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