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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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Traffic jams
is
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the
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 common
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of
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 every big city. The main reason is that too many
people
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going
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 to job or
school
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 at the same
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. Even if would be a large road, drivers get stuck
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 certain area
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 a certain
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. The number of
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 must be in places that are too far apart, so a car is a good option to solve
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. Workers and parents have
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tool
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 to reach any point in the city, but
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of
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 them is not able to change one variable – working
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. Children need to be in
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 before
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the
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 lesson and adults must be in a job before
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working
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. Both types of
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 are going to their places in the morning and return in the evening, so these times are rush hours. I used a car to get to the lesson, but I usually was late
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school
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 because of
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 rush hour at eight o’clock. No matter if I used a bus, my city hasn’t separated
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 for buses. The solution
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this
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 is finding a
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 to get to
place
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 early
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 others. Wake up an hour early is the simplest way to not get stuck on a road because
driver
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the driver
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 is already going on to
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work while others
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 take
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breakfast.
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, early wake
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time
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prepare
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prepare
mood
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 which is important to
worker
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the worker
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 during the day. When I was a little boy, my parents woke me up
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early
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 morning to not be late
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school
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 and they
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their
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 job. Rush hour is a general trouble
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a large cities
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a large city
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. Amount of
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 are got stuck on
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 road because of
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, but
everyone
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 can easily wake up
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 bit earlier to solve
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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