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The growth in international travel means that misunderstandings between countries will inevitably decrease. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#growth #travel #misunderstandings #countries #decrease
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last
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 decade has witnessed an
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ever increasing
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 number of cross-border travels due to the revolution in Transport
especially
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 in Air travel mode. while some believe that increased
travels
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 may not create much impact on
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ones
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 percipience , I tend to agree that
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 will result in
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strengthening
stregthening
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strengthening
 the bond between two
countries
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 and will eradicate several wrong perceptions.
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, People often carry
misconception
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misconceptions
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 about a
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specific
specfic
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specific
 country
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 of exaggerated news from
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the media
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 or as a part of political agendas. To clarify, Nothing is as clear as one experiencing the reality about behaviour and
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 about one country, its people and culture. Recently increased international
travels
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 opened up the door for experiencing the same and
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 plays a vital role in resolving any negative understanding between
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their
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their
 citizens.
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, Due to open interactions, Residents living in
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expat
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 inclusive
countries
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 as UAE,
US
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the US
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 often has
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 attitude towards
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co residents
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 from other
countries
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 whereas
countries
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 with no or very minimal
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 ratio tend
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 negative perceptions towards other
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.
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, Travelling abroad and exploring its heritages, and cultures and experiencing its latest advancements broaden one's horizon.
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, exposure to multiple cultures and different lifestyles significantly reduces
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intolerance
 about others regardless they are
a
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foreign citizens.
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, a Plethora of travel vlogs available on youtube or other internet sources by various travellers clearly demonstrates the special feelings and misconceptions they had about those
countries
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 when they visited
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specific
regions
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region
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, continent or
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countries
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country
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 for the very
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 time. To conclude, I
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wholeheartedly
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whole heartedly
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 believe that an increased number of international travels definitely helps to resolve any unreal negative impressions between citizens of the two
countries
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