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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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 a large number of foods that were purchased from stores and restaurants. I think people
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 meals because they do not know the value of the diet, there are a few solutions to avoid the destruction of
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 as donate the poor community with the contribution of governments I will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 with, These days people prefer to buy
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 more than their needs because they earn valuable money from their work when they compete their lunch they will not give their
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food
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 to poor children
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 they will throw it in the garbage.
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, The low-grade society has no
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 to eat because their national economy will decline, their authority will not support them and they will die every day without the nutrition they request help from the international level.
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, In the USA, the news reveals headlines that a huge factor of poor nations will require a fund to bring
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 and they will be taking loans from developed countries.
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support unrich nations their community will be joyful and it has a consequence on development and
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 doing good effect all over the globe.
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, In Germany, The local citizens will plan to provide income to neighbourliness and they will bring funds and give to charities
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which has a good impact on
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 development and the dung
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 problem will stop helping
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 trend. In conclusion, It is not good to
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 disrespectful
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 effect will destroy the new generation's future it is an essential part of life to survive with the contribution of meals and lacking society will need
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 and give them is important to help others.

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task achievement
Clarify your main ideas and make sure they are fully developed. The reasons behind food waste and solutions could be explained more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow of your paragraphs. Ensure that each paragraph directly supports your main argument and transitions smoothly to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Use more diverse vocabulary and vary your sentence structures to enhance readability and engagement.
task achievement
You have identified the main reasons for food wastage and suggested possible solutions, which shows awareness of the topic.
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You have made an effort to provide examples, which is important for supporting your arguments.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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