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Nowadays people waste a lot of food that was bought from shops and restaurants. Why do you think people waste food? What can be done to reduce the amount of food they throw away?

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Nowadays
people
waste
 a lot of
food
 that was bought from shops and restaurants. In
this
 essay, the reason for wasting
food
 and the acts which can be done by humans to reduce the
amount
 of
food
one
 throws away will be
thorougly
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thoroughly
 discussed.
Firstly
,
people
waste
food
 as
one
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they
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 tends to be satisfied with the
amount
one
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they
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 eats.
Thus
,
people
 order
food
 more than
one
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they
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 can eat as
one
 can not estimate the
amount
 of
food
. The
amount
 of
food
one
 person can consume differs on
one
's
conditions
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condition
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 at that moment. The conditions include mood, physical features and activities
one
 did on that particular day.
Furthermore
,
one
 wants to taste all sorts of
food
,
however
,
one
 can not eat all of those. Sometimes,
people
 order
food
 which
are
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is
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 well decorated just to take a photo of it and upload it on social media
such
 as Instagram. After taking
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a photo
the photo
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photo
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photos
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,
people
 just leave the
food
. The
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 reasons can be the causes of
wastage
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the wastage
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 of
food
. Apparently,
people
 can reduce the
amount
 of
food
 they throw away. The restaurants can provide more
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 about the
amount
 and taste
briefly
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brief
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 to avoid the situation that consumers can not finish the
food
 and are dissatisfied with the taste or smell.
Moreover
, consumers have to make
a
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apply
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wise
decision
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decisions
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 so that they do not
waste
 both
food
 and money.
People
 should co-operate to reduce the wastage of
food
 as it causes pollution on land. It leads to
bad
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a bad
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 smell and brings insects to the areas Conclusively, it is quite clear that
people
 greatly
waste
food
 and there are a few ways for
people
 to follow so as to reduce the
amount
 of
waste
food
.
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