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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter, Explain the reason for the noise Apologise for the noise Describe what action you will take

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Dear Mr and Mrs Jones, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I
have
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received your noise complaint from Friday,
last
 week, and I want to sincerely apologize
about
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 the noise and disturbance that
me
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I
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 and my guest caused you 5 days ago. An old friend of mine has caught his wife cheating in his flat. They have been married since 2010 and had 2 children together.
As a result
 of
such
 a
shock
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 he suffered a panic attack at his place and could not fall asleep the night before.
Therefore
 he, as a getaway, stayed over at my apartment. Due to
such
 an emotional cause of our
meeting
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 the situation went out of control. I understand that we were loud and I promise you that in case
such
 a situation arises once again I will take the guests out
instead
 of staying in the apartment or at least I will do my best to keep the noise levels down in order to not disturb your sleep. Once again, I am really sorry for the inconvenience that we caused and I promise you that I will do my best in order for that not to happen ever again. Kind regards, Peter Parker
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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