The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

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is one of the most important problems that many countries face.
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, what is the reason cause
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situation is a controversial issue. In my opinion, there are two reasons for
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increase
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and the government can do
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to resolve it.
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, it is obvious that advanced technology is becoming a driving force behind the
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of youth
crime
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. With technology developed, children can get lots of hi-tech products,
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as 3-D visual glasses, and can
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play advanced games nowadays,
such
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as PS-5. These products give children
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feeling. Meanwhile, if these games include
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content, young
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cannot realise and easy to
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developing technology can bring lots of benefits to
people
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the same time, can
also
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, the government doesn’t invest enough money in public education.
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the world is full of
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competition, so
that
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parents have to work hard for their families.
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the lack of education cause children
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know
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what is right to wrong. Their parents do not have time, and the teachers only teach them the skills or knowledge of
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. Their action will not
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by themselves
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lack of
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in school, treat the exam, etc. On the one hand, it is bad for their academic performance.
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, it will let them commit
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crime
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. I believe that
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in education is a method to resolve
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. At the same time
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community job opportunity
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young
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can
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rate
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some courses for youth
such
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as skills for
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future jobs can let them
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find
job
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the
rate
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of youth
crime
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is
most
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important thing that many countries need to pay attention to.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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