IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

More and more people move from the countryside to big cities. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages to the environment?

#people #move #countryside #cities #development #environment
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The past few decades have seen a rising tide of people migrating from countries to big cities. While urban expansion may have some positive effects, the damage to the environment is much more serious. The main disadvantage of
this
Linking Words
 trend is the increased possibility of environmental pollution. On the one hand,The growing number of urban residents will generate more household
waste
Use synonyms
 than before.
As a result
Linking Words
,
waste
Use synonyms
 treatment will need burning and spilling, which will lead to more air pollution and soil degradation.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, People who just moved to the city and have to go to work every day make more use of private cars,for which greenhouse gas emissions would intensify air pollution and. worsen the ecological condition. Spaces tend to occupy the construction of houses and office buildings, which might cause unintentional damage to the urban ecosystem. The authorities could be argued to enjoy the influx of new immigrants, according to some. It would have more revenues accumulated for environmental preservation measures
such
Linking Words
 as developing alternative energy or optimizing ways of
waste
Use synonyms
 disposal.
However
Linking Words
, A problem with a large population cannot be solved, nor can an approach to environmental damage
that is
Linking Words
 inherently irreversible. Even if a brand-new
waste
Use synonyms
 disposal system is implemented, problems will still occur when the amount of
waste
Use synonyms
 far exceeds the system’s capacity to handle it. In conclusion, I believe that when a large group of people moves from the countryside to cities, it is more likely to cause environmental problems that are irreparable.
Submitted by 1339232976 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: