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Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men’s, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career… It is said: "A woman’s place is in the home." What do you think

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Globalization has changed gender differences and united them equally, but somewhere it is thought that females are known as being housewives and they should return to their traditional roles,
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 they are doing many struggles that men are unable to do. I will discuss my opinion with relevant examples that girls are removing the housewife tag during
this
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 modern period. To commence with, In recent years,
women
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 have involved themselves in social participation, politics, employment and leadership as inflation is increasing day by day and
people
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 do not have enough revenue to fulfil their
families
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' needs due to a single person's income. In another word, girls are willing to
work
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 to help their partner accomplish their kid's dreams and provide them good education for their bright future as well as they
work
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 at home too.
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, global news has shown that 75% of parents are sending their kids to daycare because they both have jobs and these numbers are rising year to year due to the high price of everything and
people
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 do not have a choice.
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,
people
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 who lack education are not appreciating
women
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's efforts and do not have strong relationships with their wives.
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, a number of
women
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 reached the top and got success in their life and
people
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 still remember them and read about them in the books
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 as Kalpana Chawla who went to the moon and accomplished her dream if she kept concerned about
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 what they would say
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 she would not be in every science book.
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, It has been globally shown that 20% of
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 do not value
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's
work
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 in the house and do not allow them to job outside.
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, they are living in poverty and do not have good relationships with their partners. In conclusion, giving freedom to girls allows men to live peacefully with their
families
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 as they both will be earning some money and giving their
families
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 an opportunity to fulfil their needs and a male would be entitled to respect from their wife by giving them the chance to
work
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 outside.
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, the divorce rate will be fallen if
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 get some respect from their
families
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.
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