You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days of purchase, it has stopped working. You have spoken to the company representative a week ago but it has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, * introduce yourself * explain the situation * say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that my newly purchased cell

phone

is broken, and I request an urgent repair of my

phone

. I am a customer who buy a brand-new iPhone14 in the Kerrisdale store

this

Tuesday, and I

also

included an Apple Care package in my purchase.

In addition

, I am a return customer for

this

product because I consumed the same iPhone two weeks ago. After a few days, my new cell

phone

was not able to answer the call, and it was not able to turn on the silent function.

In addition

, the power of the

phone

was quickly out of power, and I perceive that these three situations are not normal. I would like to request an immediately detailed check over

this

phone

and replace some unusable minor parts so as to become a standard operating cell

phone

Otherwise

, I could accept to exchange another new identical smartphone if your mechanician could not solve my problems. I look forward to hearing your response and hope you can offer excellent customer service. Yours Faithfully Claire Chen

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

184 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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