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It is recommended by some lawmakers to punish the parents in place of their children who have commited less serious crimes like disorderly conducts or theft. They say that this will force parents to become more responsible in taking care of their children. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

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Some people suppose that criminal juveniles,
such
 as disorderly
conducts
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conduct
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 or theft,
is
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are
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 araising due to their
parents’s
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parents’
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 faults. Lawmakers recommend punishing the
parents
 for
children’s
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their children’s
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 bad
behaviours
 because it will force them to become more responsible in taking care of their
children
. In some circumstances, I agree with
this
 statement,
however
, from an ethical perspective, I think
children
 should be taught to hold
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responsibility
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of
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 their own
behaviours
. On the one hand, it is true that
parents
 have
a
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 main role
of
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in
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raising
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rasing
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children
 and their
behaviours
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the most of
kid’s
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kids’
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 activities. They must teach
children
 what is right and wrong so the kids can grow up as responsible people in society
instead
 of
become
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 juvenile offenders.
In other words
,
parents
 ought to be aware of and control
actions
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the actions
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 of their
children
, they should accept the responsibility
of
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 their involvement in crimes.
This
 fear will let the
parents
 take care of their
children
 more closely.
On the other hand
, some people
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argue
argur
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argue
 that holding
parent’s
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parents
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 accountable for their
children
’s crimes is a way of
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blaming
blamming
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blaming
, not trying to solve the problem. They
suppores
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supports
suppose
support
 that
children
 have their own way of behaviour that they want
to
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. Since
parents
 take
the
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responsibility
of
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for
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 their actions so they tend to blame
to
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others
about
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 their faults or bad
behaviours
. To
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summarize
sumarize
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summarise
,
although
parents
is
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 responsible to supervise and fix
the
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their
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children
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 bad
behaviors
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, they are not to blame for every one of their actions. These two concepts are not mutually exclusive, which
indicate
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 that they ought to both be held accountable.
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