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Pollution of rivers, lakes and seas is a major concern for people who seek to protect the environment. What are the possible causes of water pollution, and what effects does this have on animal life and human society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As the world is developing
further
, pollution of the environment is increasing rapidly. One of the major concerns for
people
 who are seeking to protect biodiversity is
water
 pollution where lakes, rivers and seas are contaminated by
people
.
This
 essay will outline the major causes and the harmful results on animals and
humans
.
To begin
 with, today factories are emitting a huge amount of chemicals into the
water
 and
this
 is their
first
 and foremost method of
disposing
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 the liquids.
As a result
 of
this
 method the compounds which are getting dissolved under the sea make a big compliance on sea life and
humans
. To
further
 illustrate
this
, most of the rural
people
 drink
water
 from makes and rivers, which is
also
 used for agricultural production, so when
people
 consume the contaminated
water
 they get various diseases, as well as the production rate of crops, declines because of harmful substances in
water
.
On the other hand
, much of the aqua fouling comes from maritime traffic because
people
 are dumping plastic from fishing boats, tankers and cargo shipping.
However
, after the
water
 is polluted by
humans
, billions of
people
 around the world have no access to clean
water
 to drink or sanitation. As an example, according to the UN, diarrhoeal diseases linked to lack of hygiene in
humans
 caused the death of about 1,000 children a day throughout the world. Despite these facts, considering the marine life under the
water
 is destroyed, because the food chain is broken and small fish are no longer consumed by predators. To sum up, the two main reasons
water
 is eutrophicated, by rubbish and chemical dumping and maritime traffic which
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have
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 caused the deaths of sea creatures and various diseases for
humans
.
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