Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child’s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Human
development
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is a complex interplay of many
factors
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. Some individuals are of the the opinion that
parents
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have the most significant
role
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in a
child’s
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development
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whereas
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others opine that friends and other environmental
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such
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as
TV
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have a more important
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. It is necessary to look at both arguments before forming an opinion.
Parents
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have direct interactions with the
children
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. They provide a sense of identification to the child. These have the greatest effect on intellectual
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and character traits. They
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play a very important
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in the socializing process of the child. Right from the bedtime stories to the behavioural habits
parents
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play a very important
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in making a child a responsible citizen. They know their
child’s
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temperament better than anyone else. They can provide critical input better than anyone else.
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why it is believed
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that
parents
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have the strongest
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in a
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development
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. Friends,
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, are important in order to help
children
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grow emotionally and socially.
Children
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find out who they are by comparing themselves to others. They learn about attitude, character and personality. Building good relationships boosts a
child’s
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self esteem
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and they find comfort in those friendships when things get tough
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as losing a pet or facing family problems.
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, friendships are essential to assuring
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develop a healthy psyche. When kids are surrounded by friends or have one close friend, they have better self-esteem, feel a sense of well-being and experience fewer social problems. Television is
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one of the most prevalent media influences in kids' lives. How much impact
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has on
children
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depends on many
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: how much they watch, their age and personality, whether they watch alone or with adults, and whether their
parents
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talk with them about what they see on
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. In my opinion, we cannot generalize as to what has more significance. In the early years
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the family generally has more impact but in
adolescence
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adolescence,
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peers and
TV
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may impact more. It appears that the power of the peer group becomes more important when the family relationships are not close or supportive.
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, if the
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work extra jobs and are largely unavailable, their
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may turn to their peer group for emotional support. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that behaviour is affected by a complex interaction of many different
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such
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as
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, peers and environment. All these are inextricably linked
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the
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of
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. There is individual variation and
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it is difficult to generalize which factor plays the most significant
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.difficult to generalize which factor plays the most significant
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  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial influence
  • learning environment
  • essential life skills
  • instill morals and manners
  • external factors
  • introduce to a variety of cultures
  • social skills
  • monitor the content
  • maintain a central role
  • exposure to different ideas
  • complement parental teaching
  • broader understanding
  • critical thinking skills
  • foundational groundwork
  • prominent influence
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