Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and work of art by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree?

Museums
and
art
galleries
have always been
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of peoples' preferences and
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pass time
pastime
.
Museums
and
art
galleries
are very popular
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tourists as places like
museums
can show
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culture and history of any county. Nowadays,
people
can get a museum tour by using
computer
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, they can see unique specimens not even visiting these countries. As for me , I deem that anyone should visit
museums
personally to feel the real atmosphere of
this
place , and see the
ojects
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objects
with his or her eyes, because only in
this
way anyone may feel
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a connection
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with these items. On the one hand, many
people
actually do not have enough money or opportunities to visit
museums
and
art
galleries
of other countries , or even worse
to
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their own country. In
this
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computer comes to help many individuals who are really interested in
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and history of other countries to discover
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world
for
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them. It is obvious
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of tours won't be as impressive as the real ones in
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real place , but it is what it is.
For instance
, anyone can search Michelangelo's, Van Gog's or Aivazovsky's canvases and admire
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them. Another thing is that
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there
they
the
ther
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there
are many invalid
people
,
people
in prison who have no chance to visit
these kind
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of places ,so it would be nice and exciting for them to explore
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world by themselves. Online
museums
and
art
galleries
come to help students of
art
faculty too,as they often have
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assignments
assignment
assigments
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assignments
to write some documentary or make slide shows about any culture. On
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hand, the pleasure to be in
museums
and
art
galleries
is really very exciting and
impressing
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for someone who is
museum
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lover, traveller,
historician
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historian
and
an
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artist. To be close to these artefacts by
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yourselves
can make you feel the ancient times and
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imagine
immagine
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imagine
ancient
civilization
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much better.
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age are
places
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in a way which can make anybody to
transfere
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transfer
ancient times. Actually , visiting
museums
both by computer or real is very useful .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital mediums
  • Curated experiences
  • Cultural heritage
  • Art appreciation
  • Personal engagement
  • Cultural exchange
  • Preservation and protection
  • Atmosphere
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Educational value
  • Virtual tours
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