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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that most countries can'
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 go out without fossil
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 as coal, oil, or natural gas while using other substitutes
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 as wind or sun is being supported in some countries. There could be several reasons for
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, and I believe it is a positive trend. Since the former ages, Human beings massively depended on fossil
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 to produce its need of
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. There were many reasons behind that, as it didn'
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 need much effort, it was highly productive, and it was easily transportable.
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 they didn'
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 expect that it will vanish or decrease from the earth in one day. With continuous and full dependence on fossil ,
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 people began to discover its disadvantages, starting from the pollution it causes to the high costs on the users and the main issue that it can'
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 be renewable so people became aware that it has a limit
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 it will no longer be available.
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, The governments began to motivate people and industries to replace fossil
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 with natural
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 of
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 as wind or solar
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. They found that it's a more clean source with lower or nearly zero exhaustion to the environment.
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 to its always availability, it's safe and can be easily renewed. Developing and poor countries aimed their forces to find more methods relying more on those
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 of
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. In conclusion, There world needs a variety of
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sources
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 and the more there are alternative
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 the easier our lives will be especially if they are not vanishing
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Carbon footprint
  • Climate change
  • Economic benefits
  • Energy security
  • Energy dependency
  • Infrastructure investment
  • Intermittent nature
  • Sustainable development
  • Technological innovation
  • Renewable energy sector
  • Pollution reduction
  • Job creation
  • Energy diversification
  • Global energy market
  • Geopolitical tensions
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Energy storage systems
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