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People, who go to live in other countries should follow the customs and tradition of the new country, to what extent to do you agree or disagree?

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Each and every country has their own customs and traditions. Here, I agree with the statement that folk should follow the lifestyle of that province and pay respect to their local habits and rituals.
To begin
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 with, we have around 180+ different countries around the world and as many numbers of states, towns and villages. When we start living in a particular place, we can see a community who have a different lifestyle. The ethnicity of society is wholly dependent upon the
culture
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 and practices of that local region.
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, customs and
culture
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 greatly influence a person who starts living in that particular place.
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, if a person who is staying in Spain is living as per his way of activity that he had followed in a village in India, will definitely
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be
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noticed.
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, needless to ,say
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one will have to follow the local
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 and habits of that particular place.
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 adding to the above, the public has their own choice to adopt a local
culture
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, an Indian who migrates to Africa may or may not be following their communal way of activity. Heritage is myriad and we need to respect them to a larger extent.
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, it is up to the community who go and settle down in a province where the law says that, whether or not they have to follow their lifestyle. In conclusion, having a good respect towards local habits of a distinct bucolic makes a man different. End of the day, the population will start respecting and giving value if they find a foreigner who is following their local folklore and
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