Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, with the rapid development of the social economy , the kinds of careers are becoming more and more abundant. Different job suits for different gender being
a new points
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some
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due to they have the varying abilities. I believe that the jobs which suit
men
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and
women
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are different. I will analyse it through the characters of vocations and the physical diversity between
men
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and
women
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. Usually,
women
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are more delicate than
men
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in sentimental, they do not reluctant to undertake some seemingly respectable jobs.Nowadays ,
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who do manual
work
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frequently receive far more money than
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who
work
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in offices,
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who
work
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in offices are always referred to as white-collar workers. A great number of
men
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are often willing to sacrifice higher pay for the privilege of becoming
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white-collar workers
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, but not to be
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manual
worker
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for keeping their dignity.
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, one who works as a dustman earns far more than another working as a clerk,
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however
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men
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are
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often more cherish their reputation than
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, thereby choosing the
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of a dirty dustman.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • inherent qualities
  • social dynamics
  • merit-based selection
  • advancements in technology
  • levelled the playing field
  • gender stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • physical differences
  • workplace
  • evolving
  • traditional view
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