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Some people think children should only read academic books. Others believe that reading books for entertainment is a equally important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is claimed that reading
books
 can only be beneficial for children.
Although
, some persons consider offspring must only read academic
books
, while others seem to be convinced that reading
books
 for entertainment
is
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 equally significant.
In
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 my part, I will discuss both options.
To begin
 with, reading
books
,
it
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is really useful and perfect for children. Nowadays, there are many different types of
volumes
.
Besides
, in these times, numerous youngsters prefer
read
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about
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the novel
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novel
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novels
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 or life
volumes
. I guess it is good
,
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 because with the help
these
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books
 youngsters can learn about important everything.
For instance
, teenagers can learn about adulthood, people, responsibility, friendship and study.
Moreover
, aids
to
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 the development of offspring, especially, if offspring will read about modern and
information
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 tomes it affects the good side of teenagers.
However
, numerous adolescents started reading worthless tomes and
thus
, some people think that children must only read academic
books
, aid to help study. Indeed, these
volumes
 have been selected in order to stretch their knowledge and broaden their culture.
Otherwise
, professors tend to test students concerning these
volumes
 as they consider them as a crucial part of their scholarship. Literacy, poems, and theatre manuscripts can only boost their critical thinking skills. In conclusion, in my view both sides
very
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 perfect and exotic. It depends on adolescents. Both options assist
to
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 learning and development. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 youngsters must read different useful tomes in order to
they
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have
affordable
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an affordable
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 destination and a memorable experience.
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