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Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live as a separate minority group with different lifestyles. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 say that when
people
moving
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 to a new country, they should acknowledge their shelves with the
exist
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culture
.
However
, others believe that it can be
understanding
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 if
people
 choose to live differently as a minority.
For
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me
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, I agree that
people
 need to
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an allowed
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allowed
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allow
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 new
culture
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cultures
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 to adapt
with
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to
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 others when they choose to move to a new place. On one hand, it can be difficult to
approved
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 something
that is
 not in common. Unfortunately, when
people
 decided to move to another country, they need to respect the underlying
culture
 which has been
occur
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 since
long
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 time ago. It is needed because
people
 need to adapt
with
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to
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 their
neighborhood
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 in order to have a harmonious life.
For example
, in Japan,
take
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 a bow when meeting
people
 is become a habit to show
honor
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.
Thus
, we should learn to do the same thing.
On the other hand
, some
culture
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cultures
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 may not suitable
with
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for
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 our
believes
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. If
this
 kind of problem happens, it is understandable when
people
 cannot follow the same thing as what the
culture
 lies.
Nevertheless
,
people
 should still show respect
to
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the
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differences.
For instance
, when
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Muslim
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muslim
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Muslims
 move to
western
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a western
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area
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areas
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 like
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, especially Amsterdam city. Amsterdam city has a nickname called "
City
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The City
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 of Sin" because they allowed citizens to do illegal things
such
 as drugs.
Therefore
, there is no obligation for
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Muslim
Muslims
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muslim
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Muslims
 to do that and so are they have to learn to live
how
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and how
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 to deal with
this
culture
. In conclusion, it is fine to not make
the
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culture
as
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a behaviour.
Nonetheless
,
people
 have to accept, respect
,
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 and adapt
with
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to
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 it according to
humanity
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humanity's
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 reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integration: The process of combining into an integral whole; cultural or social integration into a new society.
  • harmonious: Marked by agreement in feeling, attitude, or action.
  • cultural exchange: The sharing and learning of different cultural practices and ideas among groups.
  • identity: The fact of being who or what a person or thing is; cultural identity relates to a sense of belonging to a culture.
  • multicultural: Relating to or including many different cultures.
  • assimilation: The process of taking in and fully integrating into another culture.
  • diversity: The inclusion of different types of people with different traits or cultures in a group or organization.
  • cultural understanding: Awareness and acceptance of different cultures.
  • minority group: A group of people who differ from the larger group in a society based on cultural, ethnic, religious, or linguistic traits.
  • cultural preservation: The act of maintaining and protecting cultural beliefs, practices, and languages.
  • social cohesion: The bonds or ‘glue’ that bring people in a society together.
  • cultural adaptation: Adjusting and adapting to a new culture without completely abandoning one's own cultural practices.
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