Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree?

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The

children

love reading comics and

story

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books

. Some people in our society think that

children

should do other useful activities

instead

of wasting their

time

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reading.

This

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essay

easy

eassy

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essay

mostly

disagree

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with that statement and I will explain why. In the

last

several

years

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many studies have been done by experts which proved again and again that people who read

books

are more intelligent and have sharp minds than people who don't.

Books

and

comics

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stories help

children

grow

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mentally

mentaly

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mentally

. There are several

benefit

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benefits

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of reading that

vary

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from

language

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point of view to general knowledge and ???. By reading

books

children

enhance their reading and writing skills. Their ability to imagine things

also

increase

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and they become more intelligent. While there is no doubt that

children

should read story

books

as it has many

benefit

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but

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spending too much

time

reading is

also

not good for their health. Parents should limit the

time

that their

children

spend on comics and stories. There are several

risk

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of reading too much that include eye vision. If

children

spend too much

time

reading they may slightly start losing their

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eyesight

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eye sight

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leading to blindness. They can

also

find themselves alone without many friends.

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Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree?

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