Some people think that children who spend a lot of time reading children's story books are wasting their time which could be better used doing other more useful activities. To what extent do you agree?

The
children
love reading comics and
story
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storybooks
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books
. Some people in our society think that
children
should do other useful activities
instead
of wasting their
time
by
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reading.
This
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easy
eassy
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mostly
disagree
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disagrees
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with that statement and I will explain why. In the
last
several
years
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many studies have been done by experts which proved again and again that people who read
books
are more intelligent and have sharp minds than people who don't.
Books
and
comics
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stories help
children
grow
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mentally
mentaly
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mentally
. There are several
benefit
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benefits
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of reading that
vary
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from
language
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point of view to general knowledge and ???. By reading
books
children
enhance their reading and writing skills. Their ability to imagine things
also
increase
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and they become more intelligent. While there is no doubt that
children
should read story
books
as it has many
benefit
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but
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spending too much
time
reading is
also
not good for their health. Parents should limit the
time
that their
children
spend on comics and stories. There are several
risk
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of reading too much that include eye vision. If
children
spend too much
time
reading they may slightly start losing their
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eyesight
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eye sight
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leading to blindness. They can
also
find themselves alone without many friends.
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