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Some people believe that schools should teach foreign languages for primary school children. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #schools #languages #school #children #outweigh
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Despite some drawbacks of
this
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 trend, there are obvious benefits as well. In
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 essay, I am going to outline the perceived disadvantages and advantages of teaching foreign
languages
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 to primary
school
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children
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 and explain why I feel it has far more significant advantages. On the one hand,
children
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 have less free
time
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 for physical activities if the schools teach foreign
languages
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 to primary
school
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children
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. In Vietnam,
children
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 have to study a lot of things even at a very young age and they hardly have
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 for outdoor activities,
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, adding a new subject will leave
children
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 with no
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 for physical exercise, which helps them develop physically. When I was a primary
school
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 student, I spent almost the whole
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 at home completing homework and after studying too much I just wanted to rest and didn't want to do anything else.
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, teaching foreign
languages
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 to primary
school
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children
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 is much more significant.
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, it is easier for primary
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 students to learn foreign
languages
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. Many studies have shown that as people get older, it becomes more difficult to learn another
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; so teaching foreign
languages
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 to students at an early age helps them learn those
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 faster.
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, there are more job opportunities when students are good at a foreign
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. In Vietnam, currently, many companies require their employees to be able to communicate in a foreign
language
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, especially English, because of the process of economic integration and the international environment. Not being able to use a foreign
language
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 will be a big disadvantage for
children
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 in the future. In conclusion, the benefits of teaching foreign
languages
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 to primary
school
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children
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 at schools are more significant than the downsides.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foreign languages
  • primary school
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • develops
  • cognitive skills
  • enhances
  • cultural awareness
  • improves
  • communication skills
  • increases
  • future opportunities
  • promotes
  • multi-lingualism
  • affect
  • learning
  • subjects
  • qualified
  • language teachers
  • lack of
  • time
  • resources
  • difficulties
  • maintaining
  • language proficiency
  • potential
  • unequal distribution
  • opportunities
  • overall perspective
  • properly implemented
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