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Studying abroad is thought by many students to be the best way to get a good education. On the other hand, some students believe that studying in another country has many drawbacks.

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It is a common belief that studying abroad is the best way to get a good
education
.
However
, there is a more persuasive argument that studying in another country has many drawbacks because you live in a strange place with no parents or siblings nearby and have to do everything yourself. On the one hand, I agree that studying in another country helps
students
 receive a good
education
.
Students
 usually choose advanced countries, where
education
 is comprehensively developed to study abroad. These nations invest to apply a lot of technology in
education
. They
also
 focus more on practice rather than knowledge just learned on paper.
As a result
,
students
 can start working after graduation without retraining from companies.
For example
, Companies in Vietnam prioritize recruiting employees, who have studied abroad, because of their ability to work without retraining.
Nevertheless
, I believe there are many challenges when studying overseas that are much more significant. If you study abroad it means living in another nation without parents or any siblings nearby. No one will help you do anything during your busy days or when you are sick. In fact,
students
 often get up earlier to cook breakfast to eat at home and prepare lunch to bring for themselves. Returning home after a tiring studying time,
students
 have to cook their dinner.
In addition
, on days when you're ill, you still have to cook for yourself, go to the hospital by yourself, and take care of yourself. To sum up, while it is apparent that studying in a foreign country is the best way to acquire a good
education
, it is undeniable that
students
 will get a lot of difficulties during that time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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