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The advancement of internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how people in other places live.

#advancement #internet #technology #people #travel #countries #places
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In the modern day, it is easy to see
the
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pictures, videos or posts about the
life
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 of
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people
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 living in around the world.
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, I partially agree that the benefit of
internet
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 technology means
people
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 do not need to journey to oversea countries to understand how
people
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there live. The routine
life
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 of global
people
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 is posted on the
internet
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 almost
everyday
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 and through
it
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 we can know the
basic
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basics
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in
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 their
life
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.
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, you can search for information about the house of
Americans
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 on the
internet
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, you will see that
Americans
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 often live in beautiful houses with a large
yard
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yards
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 covered with green grass around the house. Inside the house is full of appliances which make their
life
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 convenient and save a lot of time to do the housework.
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, if you want you can
also
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 find daily foods of them on the
internet
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,
Americans
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 love to eat pizza, KFC and especially chocolate, and they eat it almost
everyday
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.
Although
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 you can know lots of things when you search on the
internet
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, you need to go there to understand the real
life
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 of
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a foreigner
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foreigner
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foreigners
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.
People
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 often only post beautiful pictures of their country and
life
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 but rarely mention their difficulties, which makes you always think that foreigners have desirable lives. In fact,
beside
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 the beautiful pictures about the modern
life
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 of
Americans
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 on the
internet
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, if you go there you will know that there are many homeless
people
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 on the street, households in
US
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the US
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also
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 struggle with monthly household
expenditure
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expenditures
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 and taxes, In conclusion,
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internet
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 technology provides us with a lot of knowledge about the lives of
people
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 in various nations. I believe that to really understand their lives, we need field trips.
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