Stress related illnesses are becoming increasingly common what do you think are the causes?what solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays people suffering from illness due to stress is become popular,in
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working under pressure why does
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etc.Everyone wants to be in a top position in other to achieve
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goals they have set for themselves they tend to
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their bodies not having enough rest.
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if there are unable to get a good result after putting in so much effort it can lead to depression,high blood pressure and so on .
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not having what others have ,can lead to that in my culture a lady above 23 should be married if she's not the parents
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talking and always reminding her that she should without asking the reason
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why she is single.
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a lady committed suicide because she was 30 and not married. In order to regulate mental breakdown we should learn to appreciate each other,wherever you are at the moment is not permanent there is always better days ahead.we should
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learn to see a therapist don't go when you feel sad even when you are happy you should
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learn to speak to someone. In
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we should love ourselves spread love and not hate
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • constant connectivity
  • job demands
  • work-related stress
  • societal pressure
  • achieve success
  • erosion
  • work-life balance
  • exposure
  • negative news
  • social media comparisons
  • chronic stress
  • mental health support
  • stigma
  • flexible work hours
  • stress management techniques
  • mindfulness
  • access to mental health services
  • community support systems
  • emotional support
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