The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

It's argued that states should not invest funds in cultural
activities
such
as drawing, music and stage performances which
believed
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to be a waste of effort,
Instead
of
this
governments need to pay more attention to public
services
. I completely agree with the notion, because these cultural
activities
not mean
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everyone I mean it is applicable to only a certain segment of people and another important benefit
this
while
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state
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Spending
budget
on other
services
that shall build a healthy and greener society. I am going elaborate more in forthcoming paragraphs. Admittedly, it is not a good idea to spend the country's
budget
on cultural
activities
, since, it is not applicable to all citizens
,
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because these
activities
are usually cheap to practice
however
to become popular it needs a lot of money which an average citizen can not afford,
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in UK art and craft and stage skit performance proved popular among the peoples who are filthy rich.
Thus
I believe that it is not profitable to spend money on these things.
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If a country's
budget
spends on public
services
such
as green communities,free recreational facilities, and free public transport can benefit society in many ways. greenery parks promote good oxygen levels in the environment ,
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free Gym, and Yoga classes can make people stay healthy which is not only beneficial to individuals but
also
to national expenses treatment and its facilities. Unpaid public transport can make roads less crowded with cars ad motorcycles so that less maintenance on roads and less air pollution.
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in
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a Survey conducted by the KNR Social Group in India found that people found healthy in areas
such
as free workout classes and more parks.
Hence
I believe that spending the country's
budget
on community
services
good choice for authorities. In conclusion, It is always good to spend wealth on the community rather than cultural
activities
like drama , music , and crafts,
this
is not only beneficial to individuals but
also
a good return on investment to the Government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • public services
  • economic benefits
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • equitable access
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • prioritize
  • essential services
  • healthcare
  • education
  • tourism
  • global recognition
  • holistic development
  • mutually exclusive
  • philanthropy
  • subsidize
  • infrastructure
  • socio-economic status
  • altruistic
  • civic engagement
  • aesthetics
  • civic pride
  • utilitarian
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