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Many people today use their phones to communicate by sending text messages than talking. What are the reasons for this? Does it have more advantages than disadvantages?

#people #phones #text #messages
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In modern society, the intrusion of phones has changed the way humans communicate with each other, moving
for
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face-to-face
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meeting
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,
to
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calling
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,
ending
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 up with texting are some aspects of
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 transition. I think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. One
the
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 most important advantage of
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communication
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 form is allowing more time for other tasks,
specially
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 in
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 rapid world, where everything should be achieved quickly.
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, a call takes several minutes, it could easily
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 by messages in just
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 seconds with the same meaning. Another positive side of it
,
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 is
its
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 permanent,
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, the text message could stay a longer time
in
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 our phones, which will allow us to repeat
it
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 as much as we want. On the other side, texting is a
communication
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 route where any sensational or emotional expressions
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.
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 might lead to a complete misinterpretation by the receiver. I can add
also
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communication
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, which will be allowed just for those who know how to write. The result of
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some
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category
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 of people.
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,
if
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 the sender doesn't use properly the punctuation in
its
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 message, the result would be unexpected and might create conflicts between them. To sum up, texting in modern society is much more flexible and
gain
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 time, but appearing in our daily
communication
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for
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 many people. That's why I believe that
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 disadvantages are more
presented
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 than its advantages.
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