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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Millions of youngsters are being taught at school to make a fundament for their future careers.
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, there has been much debate about whether academic subjects should be the priority of schoolboys and girls themselves or
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 life
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 need to be added to the basic
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 of youth. In my opinion, despite the significance of academic study and exams,
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 be taught dressing and cookery lessons. On the one hand, the advantages of studying academic subjects are twofold.
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, having high results in examinations may pay them off in their future career, so
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much attention should be directed to academic performance to be prosperous.
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, academic subjects provide
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 with fundamental
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that is
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 needed in tertiary education.
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, in European Universities, most undergraduates are supposed to lack
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mathematical
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 which is highly important to master academic fields,
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 as Microeconomics and Statistics. Without deep understanding,
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 can fail their final exams,
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 the significance of academic understanding must not be forgotten.
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, having the
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 of practical
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 including cookery and dressing seminars can be useful for
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 who live and study far from their parents since if they know how to cook healthy food, they will pressurize
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themselves .
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, nowadays almost all people are being assessed by their
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dress code
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dress code
, which is why not only
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the student
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student
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 but all individuals have to be taught dressing
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. In conclusion,
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 once again reaffirm that in spite of the importance of
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academic study in
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 curriculum,
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 feel that
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practical
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,
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 as dressing and cookery classes are paramount for
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 to grow as an individual.
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