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Band 4.5

Write 1000 words about an experience you have had learning another language. You can talk about the teacher, the material, methods and whether it worked for you and why?

Learning a
second
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language
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 has always been a passion of mine. During my primary education as a
student
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 I was forced to learn Tamil, which was widely used by people in the North East province and estates workers in the country and it was recommended in the school syllabus as well.
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However
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 the learning process did not interest me much because it involved memorizing words and I hardly had anyone to talk with. Surprisingly, my term test marks for
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 high and I was
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overjoyed
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over joyed
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 for receiving good grades. When I recall
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 experience, today I understand
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 good grades were merely an illusion because I restricted myself to memorize a set of words in the syllabus to pass the exam without acquiring the
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 in its full potential to be a fluent
speaker
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. Later on, still in my primary
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 I had to learn another
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 and found it fascinating because the tone and flow appealed to me so much. It is nothing else than the Gateway to the globe, the
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English
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language
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. Since my
childhood
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 I was a passionate learner of
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 and many teachers helped me to progress in the process of
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 acquisition. Even though I was good
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 learning the school syllabus and scoring good marks
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 evaluation tests I could not achieve fluency in
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 until I met
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 particular mentor a few years ago. My mentor is a non-native
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 of
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, from Israel and I met her on the social medial platform in my quest to improve my
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 Skills. Her L1 is Hebrew and she had persuaded her tertiary education in the USA for about four years. Literally, she had worked studiously to improve her
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 abilities in
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 resulting to achieve her
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 fluency. My mentor, Aleena, teaches her students through her own experience and she regularly discusses the challenges she had to face throughout her
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 learning Journey.
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, what attracted her to me most is that being a non-native
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 who actually achieved
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native like
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 fluency, she has sound knowledge of obstacles
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 being faced by other non-native speakers and I think the phenomena cannot be understood by a native
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 because they are privileged with
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 Universal
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. Her frequent advice to students was the best way to be fluent in
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 is “ practice.”
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 she generally used pragmatic material and methodologies for teaching. She used the Direct Method, Audio lingual method, communicative
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 teaching and Humanistic Approach which I
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 aware
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 methodologies of teaching. I would love to briefly explain her ways of teaching and
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the resources
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 she used.

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