Nowadays many women are working a full-time jobs like men. What do you think about this phenomenon?

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In today's world,

women

work

under the same conditions and have

a full-time jobs

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a full-time job

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as men. I believe that

women

should

work

and have the same responsibilities as men. And, of course, to be

highly paid

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professionals and grow in

the

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their

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career. On the one hand,

women

have the right to

work

all day. They should not stay at home with their children and only take care of them. They should develop and communicate in a team.

On the other hand

, there are jobs in which both

women

and men can

work

Women

can earn the same high wages. They can develop and hold high positions.

In addition

, house duties and child-rearing can be shared between a man and a woman. In conclusion, I believe in

strong

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the strong

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possibilities and energy of

women

work

a full-time jobs

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a full-time job

full-time jobs

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and to have

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apply

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good

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well

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paid ones.

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2Word repetition
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144 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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