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In the modern world,it is possible to shop, work and communicate whith peoplevia internet without any face-to-face contact with others. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #shop #work #whith #peoplevia #internet #contact
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Nowadays, most
people
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 do shopping online and have jobs distantly.
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 essay agrees with the point of view that all persons can communicate via the internet without any face-to-face contact with others.
People
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 are used to shopping via the internet. All shops now have websites and mobile applications. I am sure that it is quite convenient to make purchases in your free
time
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. You can do it
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late in the evening or at weekends from your
home
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. Even purchases can be returned through the post office or a return office and you don't have to go to the shop. You can fill in all the paperwork from
home
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 and the money for the refund comes straight to your bank card.
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, you don't have to stand in queues and waste your free
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.
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, you can spend
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 with the family and do some activities. I
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 believe that most tasks we can apply distantly. Of course,
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 does not apply to professions
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 as doctors or judges,
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. But in the modern
world
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people
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 can work and communicate through the internet. There are many programs
such
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 as zoom, skype, and
whatsupp
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WhatsApp
 which can be used as сommunicators. There is no need to have any face-to-face contact with others. The number of employers offering
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home
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 is increasing every year. In conclusion, there is confidence to do shopping online is much more convenient and working from
home
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 seems more comfortable and happy.
People
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 can have more
time
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 to travel and do nice things.
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