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some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages ?

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A large number of
people
 like to spend most of their life near their hometown for several reasons.
This
 attitude has some benefits and drawbacks which I will mention in
this
 essay. These types of
people
 do not like to leave their comfort zone and face new challenges of living in a new area far from the place they lived for a long time. These challenges can be
such
 as trying to find a new job among
people
 that they are not familiar with and dealing with their issues alone without family support. They
also
 have the fear of feeling homesick, missing their
parents
 and friends,
missing
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 culture and local food. There are a number of negative points and advantages for these
people
. Disadvantages can be missing some good and sometimes money-making job opportunities in other far cities or countries only because they tend to live near their hometown. They
also
 lose out on the chance of exploring new places and living life in a new way, trying new dishes and having adventures.
However
, living near loved ones has advantages as well, these
people
 can aid their
parents
 in difficult situations when
parents
 are sick or need someone to take care of them. They believe that
parents
 spent the best years of their lives taking care of their children and when
parents
 get old it is the children's responsibility to compensate. Another benefit is that they always have a sense of confidence that whenever they face difficulties, there are a number of
people
such
 as best friends and relatives to assist them to solve their issue. All in all, spending most of life near to birthplace, has its own benefits
such
 as living near
parents
 and drawbacks
such
 as missing some job opportunities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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