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Schools should not force children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Over the past few years, there has been an increasing number of people learning a foreign
language
. And
children
 are
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force
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 to learn a foreign
language
 by schools, in my opinion, I partly agree with both
side
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 of the idea. On the one hand, it is undeniable that learning a foreign
language
 brings a lot of benefits.
Firstly
, learners can study
in
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all over the world if they have a good level of foreign
language
.
Therefore
, it will be very useful for the
children
 if they know another
language
.
Moreover
, knowing a foreign
language
also
 help
children
 to make new friends from other countries.
On the other hand
, the statement to force
children
study
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 a foreign
language
also
 has some drawbacks. Nowadays, more and more schools offer programmes in English or
other
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language
. And the consequence is that the
children
 have to learn a foreign
language
, which is not their mother
language
. They can not study the
language
 well
is
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 they do not want to learn it and they can even affect their concentration and mood at school. In conclusion, I think both sides of the idea have their own benefits and drawbacks.
Therefore
, I think schools should encourage
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children
 to learn if they want to but should not force them.
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