Films and computer games containing violence are popular. Some people say they have negative effects on society and should be banned. Others say they are just harmless relaxation. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is a fact that in recent days, movies and

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games

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containing

violence

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are common in

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. While some people argue that it has negative impacts on individuals and

society

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and should be banned, others believe that these activities are just useful relaxation. From my perspective, I

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these views and would discuss both views in

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films and

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games

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society

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is that

children

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tend to learn easily violent actions and do

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things from these

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or movies.

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and interest for

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in real life. The

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gaming addiction is more popular

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children

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are lazy to do outside activities and they would have

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films and

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is that

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may recharge their energy after playing these

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, these violent

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and movies , especially

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may help make new friends for them because of online

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and

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. In conclusion,

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films and

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containing

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have negative effects on

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, these may help

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in some roles of useful relaxation and I agree

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

230 words

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desensitize
aggressive behavior
glorify
artistic expression
pent-up emotions
media consumption
model for conflict resolution
fiction vs. reality
outlet for frustration
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