People continue to recommit crimes even after being penalized for their wrongdoings. Why do you think this happens? How can crimes be stopped?

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that some ex-
criminals
will re-offend after serving
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prison sentences. There are multifarious reasons that
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issue and various measures that could address
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this
issue is that
prisoners
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correctional
activities. Some offenders choose to join the gang in jail to protect themselves from being bullied by other
prisoners
, and these
criminals
might commit crimes again with gang members after coming out from jail.
Secondly
,
prisoners
who have been jailed for many years can not adapt well
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the fast-paced modern society, which means they do not have work skills and knowledge that are compatible with the information era. What's more, the majority of
criminals
are unwelcome by their communities, residents are
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afraid
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afraid
of them and
prisoners
are discriminated
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people especially when they
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for jobs. Under
this
situation, some ex-offenders might have the idea that
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the law again to back to prison where they could get free food and shelter.
However
, there are still some effective ways can tackle
this
problem.
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of all,
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correctional activities should be upgraded and
prisoners
should be jailed
separetedly
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separately
separated
in different areas due to different natures of crime, in
this
way the gang issue in jail could be mitigated.
In addition
,
prisoners
should
also
receive vocational education to help them acquire job skills and the prisoner who performed best should be able to introduce to
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after being discharged. Meanwhile, modern technology should
also
be brought to
prisoners
with limited time,
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and
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which could help them have
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understanding
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understanding
of the soaring development of technology.
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,
criminals
could adapt better after finishing punishment sentences and they might not choose to break the law again. In conclusion, even though there are many contributors cause some
criminals
cannot
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well and recommit crimes, we still get some useful methods
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help to deal with these problems.
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