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Many working people grt little or no exercise either during the working or in their free times and have healt problems as a result. Why do many working people do not get enough exercise? what can be done about these problem?

#people #grt #exercise #times #healt
The maps illustrate how the industrial part of Norbiton town is planned to be developed. In general,
this
 area is to be transformed from an industrial to
a residential sites
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residential sites
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 with the construction of supporting facilities. All factories around streets and
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 are planned to be altered to housing. From the north of the
roundabout
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 a new
street
 is to be developed and it passes over the river to reach the new buildings that are constructed on the farmland with the connection of a path from the east of the residential area to the west parallel to the river. On the south of the river, on the east side of the roundabout among new housing access to a playground from north of the
street
 is to be made while a school is planned to be constructed on the end east of the
street
. On the south of the main
roundabout
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 a
street
 is to be developed to reach a small roundabout with the medical centre on the east and the commercial centre on the west of it. The new small roundabout connects the west of the area to the east with a
street
.
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