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There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #countries #move
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The line graph illustrates the number of three various types of crime in Panama City between 2010 and 2019. Overall, the changing rates of burglary exhibited a downward trend over the period given, whereas those of car theft and robbery remained fairly static.

 As you can see, the figure for burglary took the lead in 2010, at just under 3500, and
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 went up to about 3700 in 2011, before decreasing dramatically and hitting the bottom to only 1000 in 2015, which. It is worth noting that
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 accident saw the greatest reduction in the annual total statistic, which decreased by 2700 during 4 years. After that,
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 number experienced a slight growth to around 1400 and remained the same at approximately 1300 to 1500 after 2016.

 In terms of car theft, the crime rate was ranked
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, at around 2800 in 2010 and stayed unchanged in 2 years.
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, it dropped gradually to just over 2000 in 2013, and
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 took over the crime rate of burglary after 2014, before slightly climbing back to its former figure.
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, the number of robberies almost remained steady throughout the time, at around 500 to 1000.
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