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Environmental damage is the problem of most countries. What factors damage the environment and who should take responsibility?

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Ecological degradation is an issue associated with many nations.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons
such
 as
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 of
plastic
 and fossil
fuels
 which cause
damage
 to the environment and every person should take responsibility to minimise the adverse effects. One of the major contributors to environmental deterioration is the irresponsible usage of
plastic
products
. Most
products
 made out of
plastic
 are non-biodegradable, and the majority of the water bodies in the present day are polluted with
such
products
. A study conducted by Oxford University concluded that
plastic
products
 are directly responsible for 65% of marine species extinction. The
use
 of
plastic
 is not limited to one country, they are in wide
use
 throughout the world. Another significant source of environmental
damage
 is the
use
 of fossil
fuels
. Petroleum product
use
 has increased exponentially in the past century. Fossil
fuels
 are being extracted from Earth's core at an alarming rate. CO2 emissions from the burning of these petroleum
products
 are responsible for Ozone layer depletion. Turning to the responsibility for
this
damage
, every person using
plastic
 and fossil
fuels
 should take responsibility and start using these
products
 responsibly. Educating every individual on the adverse effects of the over-
use
 of these
products
 is the only viable solution to reduce the extent of the
damage
. Many people
use
plastic
 bags and
dispose
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 them without thinking about the consequences. Encouraging them to turn to more environmental-friendly
products
 may reduce the
use
 of plastics, thereby decreasing the harmful effects caused by them. In conclusion, Environmental destruction is a problem faced by many countries, the major contributors are
plastic
 and fossil
fuels
.
This
 problem can only be solved with the collective effort of every individual using these
products
.
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