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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the progress of a small town centre which is called Islip. The upper layout is the current figure of the town and the other map is the future plans for its enrichment.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most significant change
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 the town is the circled
road
 around the centre. Various other developments including housing and
shops
 are planned for the future. with regards to the current layout of Islip, it is demonstrated that 2-row
shops
 are on either side of
main
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road
.
However
, it appears
thet
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that
 the upper one will be demolished to make new housing,a car park, a shopping
center
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 and a bus station. The main
road
 in the first map, run from the east to the west. It is replaced by pedestrians
road
 in the second layout. The park's location will not change, but it seems that the park will be reduced in size. The school location will be the same as well, but it will be re-designed. The
second row
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shops
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 will be located in the centre of the future figure and new housing will be added alongside the old one under the
shops
.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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